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Post by lyricationnation on Mar 16, 2018 6:43:31 GMT
Hi, I'm new here, so forgive me if I do something wrong. Anyway, here's my character's info!
Kaukileya, of the extinct Kala Yatrika tribe.
A monster made out of pure pencil graphite, with the ability to shape-shift. He may seem menacing, but he is actually nice once you get to know him. After the death of his tribe, he fell into a condition named Visada by his tribe, or depression to us. He's alright now, though. He is tall, about 8 feet tall, and very slender. His entire body is black, and almost featureless, like a figurine. He has no face, so he cannot speak, but he can write very well. Instead of hands and feet where his arms and legs end, they taper off into a cone. When he forms hands, they are very blocky, because he doesn't know quite know how to make hands.
The Kala Yatrika Tribe
A tribe of anthropomorphic art supplies that was wiped out almost entirely. They resided in Brazil, before being decimated by as of yet unknown attackers. It was average for the male tribe members to be as tall as 8 to 9 feet, with the women reaching 7'6" to 8'6". They built stone houses, which have now become known as the 'Lekhana Ruins'.
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Post by Zaezar on Mar 16, 2018 17:48:23 GMT
I appreciate how eager you are to add to the world of Cyden! However this doesn't fit with the established world. Tribesman exist in the world already thanks to Ashtrek, a very active user around the community. So having a tribe is totally fine, just need to find somewhere that they can stake a claim that makes sense too. Heck, enough places were destroyed that they could take up residence nearby one of them. Their culture and phrases they use for common experiences is also totally fine. The problem that we come across is that they are anthropomorphic art supplies. That goes pretty against the "no magic" clause of Cyden. Feels like a golem-esque thing and that's not really possible here. The only "magic" we have is the Cursed Family and they have a lot of limitations associated with them when building a characters to compensate and limit them. You can read a bit more of them here: projectcyden.boards.net/thread/10/heckUsually I have suggestions on keeping the core of a character and changing small things to make them "fit" as well as giving suggestions to develop them in that direction. But the base level of this character is simply too vastly different from what is acceptable that I simply don't have any suggestions for you. A Cursed family member that sweats graphite? Not that much of a curse. Or that bad, really. I like the idea of a character who is on a travel around the world. Heck, that is a good basis to tell a TON of stories and would even fit in with a character of mine that just collects/shares stories. If you want to discuss stuff we have a Discord with most all the active members of the community chatting. You can get much faster tips and suggestions there. projectcyden.boards.net/thread/132/new-discord-server Otherwise we can always chat here about that!
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